Jan
Nest Dew
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What do you think of this poem?
Ok i have been writing since i was 2 so please i could really use your advice before i put it on the web i don’t want to make a fool out of myself so tell me what you think of this
SPRING
It’s early in the morning,around 7:30 a.m it’s nice, warm and the sky is painted a soft orange, just the way I like it. The sun beats down on my face while i ride my bike up and down the road. The pretty golden grass where the squirrels search for nuts. The birds chirping nice and soft as the mothers feed the chicks in their nest. The dew on the morning flowers.The wind blowing through my hair. It all seems just so perfect I don’t think it can get any better. It’s a place to escape noise,it’s a place i can be me. And right now i don’t think ther can be any place i’d rather be
please be honest and tell me what you think thanx for the help
Don’t be so self judgmental. I thought it was pretty good. Somethings I suggest is to get it to rhyme a little more and put each sentence on its own line so it reads like a poem. If you want you can check out some poems on http://www.chapteread.com (a great writing community). This sites great because it’s geared to help you out as a writer. I’m signed up so if you post any other poems I’d like to read them.
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